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I'm so sad persimons are out of season right now :(
The best I've eaten have been from Carlet, Valencia ♥



From my tutti frutti series ([link]):
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I have to say that this is one of my favorite pictures from your series! I love your use of color, especially the make-up, which is very clever and matches the fruit almost perfectly. Your facial expression is very sweet and a little more subdued than some of your other works, and this coupled with your natural skin and turquoise hair makes the image feel very cool and refreshing. And, as always, the lighting and color of your eye is brilliant! It really completes and brightens the image.

I did take off half a point for technique, but only for minor reasons. Your eyeliner seems a bit edited on to me, as it appears to be covering part of your eye-lashes and just seems too inorganic next to your eye-shadow and the shadows around your eyelids. I'm sorry that I can't really articulate it well! Also, one strand of hair next to your face is grey instead of turquoise, and although I love the shine on your lips the one on the top right is a little bit distracting. These are just nit-picky things though, and don't detract from the impact of your portrait!

Lastly, the reason why I docked two points from originality is because of the color scheme and your pose. Although I love the colors and the mood they create, you've used blue and orange in a lot of your previous portraits in this series. The combination is definitely a treat for the eye, but I'd love to see you experiment with color some more! Additionally, the pose, although whimsical, is one you that you use a lot and it would be interesting to shake things up a little bit in the future.

All in all this picture is beautiful, and is one of my favorites from this series. I can't wait to see what you'll do next! :)
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I'm not so much into DeviantArt and have never written a critique, but I enjoy your work a lot (specially for the colours, they're just perfect, I don't know how to express how much I like the colour in your art in general) and finally I've plucked up the courage to write a critique. I'm not an expert, so I'll just tell you what I see and what I like in my simple and inexperienced taste.

First of all, I really love it, but didn't want to go crazy with the stars and give you all five stars in everything because I think you've reached a point in which you can get so much more from (constructive) critique than for simple and straight praising. I've tried to escalonate them, so you can see what I like more and what I like less about this picture.

Starting with the "bad" things: as you see, the Technique is what I like less of this picture. I think the cropping of the image is perfect, I think your mastering of Photoshop is stunning as always, but there are two things that I noticed when I stared a bit longer at the image. First one, the eyebrows. I think colouring them rather than leaving them in their natural colour is a good idea, as it matches the colour of the hair, but you can see the trace of the photoshop brush and you left the tip of the eyebrow uncolored. Second thing is that I've noticed the skin is not even, and has some blurred parts and some other with great definition in which every detail can be seen; when you enlarge the picture, it becomes more clear. They didn't get my eye the moment I saw the picture, it was while staring at it more closely. So, tiny details, but still there.

Next thing is Vision, which I have interpreted as "having the vision to do this" or something like that, it's not very clear. Of course, great vision. I love how you pick unusual fruits of which I have never heard of; it makes it so much more interesting than the typical photos with strawberries, bananas... you know.

Originality! Well, you've done this before, covering your eye with a fruit and make a photo, okay, but since this photos are part of a series and since each portrait is so different from the previous one, I think we can discard that. I think that choosing a persimon (persimon? what? it's a pokémon, isn't it?), matching your make up with it, this contrast between two very different but matching colours... well, that is something not everyone can think up. Anyone at all but you, I would even say. So yeah, I think it's one of the greatest strengths of this photo.

And the last one, Impact, the most important in my opinion. Four stars and a half because I haven't fallen off my chair and cried in awe (that is to say, I have considered five stars the uttermost perfection, so kind of unreachable). But hey, this has gotten me to write this long critique, which I never did before, so... Yeah, great impact. I love the colors, again, I refuse to stop saying that. Seagreen + oranges/reds/yellows = win, at least for me. The texture of the persimon is just... I don't now, I like it a lot, it gives the photo a "fresh" or "natural" apparel, and a very realistic one... You are a master editing eyes, but this are the most beautiful eyes I have seen in any of your artworks! I love how it combines again that seagreen with warm colours... and of course, I love how the makeup matches the fruit. Also, being concentric lines they are like focusing the attention to your eye... Great, great impact, it's what I like best of your pictures, and specially with this one.

This is clearly my favourite one from this series of yours, and I strongly encourage you to do more (please do). Y para acabar, un poco de castellano que hay que promocionar la tierra. Mi inglés está un poco oxidado, así que algunas cosas son un poco en plan traducción brutal del español... Espero que las entiendas bien. Ahora en nuestro idioma, estupendo trabajo y una foto increíble... ¡Sigue así!
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BillyNikoll Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I like your technique and sense of color.
jennasartwork Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013   Traditional Artist
I love this series, keep it up :)
Onde-me Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2013
It's funny ^^
azradism Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
lovely !

btw you look a lot like jessie j here :O
Kaz-Da-ShellBullet Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
I don't how you do it, but all your colors always bring a natural feel. They even compliment the other colors used in that single photo. One thing I did notice before reading the other critique's was the orange eye line color. Although I like the shade, I have to agree it does look slightly edited. I noticed that on the skin some parts seemed smoother than others, I thought only a blur effect for a touch up would cause that. Sure enough it was, that right there is what you want to avoid. Not the tool itself, but the part where people notice it from just a few glances.

I also noticed your neck, I'm gonna guess you used a camera which focus's on the foreground, or a blur tool. Either way it looks great, it draws more attention to your face and everything going on in front of the supposed lens. The eye color is beautiful, btw. A combination of that, plus the expressions go well together. I really like this, I love seeing how creative people can be doing what they love. Awesome job!!!
SolitudeMissing Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Student Photographer
So cute!
UtiliaMignano Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
wow! I love all you portrait!! You're very good! ^_^. I'd like to draw you. Can I do it? ^_^.. have a nice day
Maclafel7 Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it! And you're really pretty :)
QAuZ Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013
Hi! Your work has been featured here [link] :heart: :hug:
YukiHachisu Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The expression is VERY different from what I've usually seen you do
I like the change :3
I'm in love with the colours!!
the entire image is enjoyably strange, the curl of lip is almost intoxicating
it breathes contentedness and it makes the veiwer feel as oddly happy as you look here
It's beautiful :3
Captive-Hearts Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Student General Artist
Omg I love your dimples!!! I've like, never seen 'em before! :D :D
GoldenLapis Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Persimon smile! Sweet as well, very cool, also the depth of her eye, the colors and glow, wow!
Ontheroadtonowhere Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
I'm in love with this orange lipstick. Where did you get it? (This is also a really nice picture and I like it a lot. But really, I want that lipstick.)
Ettin1 Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it :D
The-Lost-Hope Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Student General Artist
Very nice image. I like your expression in this one. :) Random but what does a persimon taste like?
piquantgirl Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lovely :)
Lord-Mo Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The eye doesn't fit with the rest of the pic but I love your smile :)
Tanoi Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Very interesting :)
kagnomi2 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013
I dunno...this works isn't as impactful to me. It's still creative and fresh but....I feel like it's not as impactful or as strong a picture as your grape or tangerine works.
Pedro-Perez-Pedrero Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Student General Artist
here on chile, the persimón season just begun!!!

jummy jummy...

nice portrait!!!
i like that little lines around your mouth, it makes a very beautiful effect...

Picsonthewall Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013
The color contrast in this picture is great, plus I love how glossy your lips look. :)
Distraughtamus Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
loving the photo the fruit and your green locks
safawazhere Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Professional General Artist
I love permison
Bartsartny Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
that persimmons kind of looks like you
chancerox Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is more simple compared to your other tutti fruttis. i love it :)
Geknecht Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Boring photo, but a beautiful smile.
looselps Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013
awesome! :o what more can i say... just WOW
pjs1998 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Great color and composition!
MarionetteVignette Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013
i love that smile soo much amazing!
xSakuraKurox Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
LOVE your eyes!
nexus6fotografia Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013
Aquí tienes un aire a Angela Molina cuando empezó ...
Espectacular foto :)
ArtGoldArt Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
keifferone Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013
Great smile.
MaddLouise Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
SpectraGeko Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Professional General Artist
I finally discovered what a persimmon looks like.
Ydriss Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It looks a little bit odd to me, I think it's the smile that looks a little on the creepy side.
d-albie Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Definitely one of my favorites from your tutti frutti series!
DESstudios Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013
as always, I love your work...This is just a fun image. It makes me smile
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TalesOfNightWing Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Student General Artist
This is my new favorite by you!
angela10000 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013
Amazing picture!! I really love how your eyes look♥
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