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RICOH IMAGING COMPANY, LTD.
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PENTAX K-3
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1/125 second
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70 mm
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Jun 9, 2014, 3:27:48 PM
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one life. by Senju-HiMe one life. by Senju-HiMe
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self-portrait

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other work: demons. by Senju-HiMeradioactive. by Senju-HiMeafter midnight. by Senju-HiMe
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Given 2014-06-23
one life. by Senju-HiMe is a stunning self-portrait full of concept, attention to detail and emotion. ( Featured by Kaz-D )
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It's definitely an "attention getter."

But it's missing something critical. It appears obvious that the eyes are the focus of the piece, but somehow they don't stand out enough from the rest of the piece (mere shine is not enough, there has to be some "air" to the stare or glare--whether it be intensity, frailty, etc.) Perhaps it all needs is a slight touch of darker contrast--just an idea.

The title also deserves attention; meaning that it seems to be too simple, specially in the ambition that the picture tries to capture. One life comes off as generic, and sadly, it has been "cliched" by popular media. Something more specific would shine the humanity of the individual in the piece, such as "Cary," or "ID Tag: xxxx."

What confuses me is the background and overall compositions. The piece is suggestive of an "impromptu candid" shot (thus the dirt, possibly blood< on her skin, yet the background is dark--so I'm left to my own devices to guess a context. To add to that, the stance of the subject in reference to the camera looks like a 3/4 photograph--which takes away from the candid nature of it all.

"So, was anything done right, according to you Mr. Critiquer Anus guy?" Well, yes.

The hair is done in a natural, but frazzled way, a.k.a. it doesn't take anything away, it adds to the piece. Also, the lighting (excluding the background) on the subject is a good balance of "natural moonlight" qualities with the good sharpness, and no over-the-top shine. It captures enough detail of the uniform, and of course, the helmet. This is where the light may have aided in the eyes, by perhaps touching up the brightness on the eyes--but not too much either, it can become to obvious and become a facade of itself. aka. instagram douches who take a filter and think they are photographers pros.

That's all. I hope I don't come off too harsh. It's been a while since I've critiqued anything and this is my first critique on DA.

Good luck. And as I tell anyone I critique, I'm not a pro myself, so take what I say as partial opinion, partial observation, and partial salt.
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The expression on her face is of desperation and loneliness , her gaze is soul piercing and reaches out beyond the photo , the dark background adds a feel of solitude to make this a breathtaking yet sad portrait , the mud on her face and her chapped lips along with the camouflage clothes go really well.The crooked helmet stabilizes the portrait.This is a very well done self portrait and shoes the desperation that go through when are truly alone , an amazing work of art and i look forward to the artists work , and sorry if i couldn't provide the best critique , its my first time.
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cipher-X Featured By Owner 4 days ago  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Masterfully done.

I don't agree with the critique of the eyes, they are bold and real, you are immediately drawn to that gaze and the choice of lighting complements them - any more manipulation would have been superfluous.  I love the image's feeling of someone too young to have seen the horrors they have. The title is also fitting and can have multiple meanings depending on the mindset of the viewer...One Life To Give For An Ideal or One Life Sacrificed and Squandered In War or One Life and Its' Ordeals.

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Reflections-Edge Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2014
this is beautiful. :)
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Yorkiebaby Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2014
Great pic, very haunting look, very well captured....
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GraceTornoshaya Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2014
oNE LIFE IS NOT ENOUGH.
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MizraSparrow Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow! This is amazing! I love it! Heart 
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InemanLukas Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2014  Hobbyist
Very interesting piece!voodoo doll blink emote 
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Hoshii-K Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2014
I really like this one ! Awesome work !!! :D
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SHINRA71 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
<3 *-*
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henriqueart Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Professional
lindo trabalho Clap 
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