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RICOH IMAGING COMPANY, LTD.
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PENTAX K-3
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70 mm
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Jun 9, 2014, 3:27:48 PM
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one life. by Senju-HiMe one life. by Senju-HiMe
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thank you, dad.

self-portrait

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other work: demons. by Senju-HiMeradioactive. by Senju-HiMeafter midnight. by Senju-HiMe
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Given 2014-06-23
one life. by Senju-HiMe is a stunning self-portrait full of concept, attention to detail and emotion. ( Featured by Kaz-D )
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It's definitely an "attention getter."

But it's missing something critical. It appears obvious that the eyes are the focus of the piece, but somehow they don't stand out enough from the rest of the piece (mere shine is not enough, there has to be some "air" to the stare or glare--whether it be intensity, frailty, etc.) Perhaps it all needs is a slight touch of darker contrast--just an idea.

The title also deserves attention; meaning that it seems to be too simple, specially in the ambition that the picture tries to capture. One life comes off as generic, and sadly, it has been "cliched" by popular media. Something more specific would shine the humanity of the individual in the piece, such as "Cary," or "ID Tag: xxxx."

What confuses me is the background and overall compositions. The piece is suggestive of an "impromptu candid" shot (thus the dirt, possibly blood< on her skin, yet the background is dark--so I'm left to my own devices to guess a context. To add to that, the stance of the subject in reference to the camera looks like a 3/4 photograph--which takes away from the candid nature of it all.

"So, was anything done right, according to you Mr. Critiquer Anus guy?" Well, yes.

The hair is done in a natural, but frazzled way, a.k.a. it doesn't take anything away, it adds to the piece. Also, the lighting (excluding the background) on the subject is a good balance of "natural moonlight" qualities with the good sharpness, and no over-the-top shine. It captures enough detail of the uniform, and of course, the helmet. This is where the light may have aided in the eyes, by perhaps touching up the brightness on the eyes--but not too much either, it can become to obvious and become a facade of itself. aka. instagram douches who take a filter and think they are photographers pros.

That's all. I hope I don't come off too harsh. It's been a while since I've critiqued anything and this is my first critique on DA.

Good luck. And as I tell anyone I critique, I'm not a pro myself, so take what I say as partial opinion, partial observation, and partial salt.
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The expression on her face is of desperation and loneliness , her gaze is soul piercing and reaches out beyond the photo , the dark background adds a feel of solitude to make this a breathtaking yet sad portrait , the mud on her face and her chapped lips along with the camouflage clothes go really well.The crooked helmet stabilizes the portrait.This is a very well done self portrait and shoes the desperation that go through when are truly alone , an amazing work of art and i look forward to the artists work , and sorry if i couldn't provide the best critique , its my first time.
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ShasyaMars Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2014  New member
amazing!!!!!
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cipher-X Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Masterfully done.

I don't agree with the critique of the eyes, they are bold and real, you are immediately drawn to that gaze and the choice of lighting complements them - any more manipulation would have been superfluous.  I love the image's feeling of someone too young to have seen the horrors they have. The title is also fitting and can have multiple meanings depending on the mindset of the viewer...One Life To Give For An Ideal or One Life Sacrificed and Squandered In War or One Life and Its' Ordeals.

Perfect. Panda Bunny Neko Misc Emoji-07 (Applause) [V1] 
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Reflections-Edge Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2014
this is beautiful. :)
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:iconyorkiebaby:
Yorkiebaby Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2014
Great pic, very haunting look, very well captured....
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:icongracetornoshaya:
GraceTornoshaya Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2014
oNE LIFE IS NOT ENOUGH.
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:iconmizrasparrow:
MizraSparrow Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow! This is amazing! I love it! Heart 
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:iconinemanlukas:
InemanLukas Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2014  Hobbyist
Very interesting piece!voodoo doll blink emote 
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:iconhoshii-k:
Hoshii-K Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2014
I really like this one ! Awesome work !!! :D
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:iconshinra71:
SHINRA71 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
<3 *-*
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:iconhenriqueart:
henriqueart Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Professional
lindo trabalho Clap 
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:iconrukibunny:
rukibunny Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Powerful. Well done!
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:iconvergil-is-eternity:
Vergil-is-eternity Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014
You remind me of Lora Croft from the newer game. Quite lovely
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:icondraug1:
Draug1 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014
Amazing!
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:iconblacksmithofangels:
BlacksmithofAngels Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
such a powerful piece, masters work!
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:iconblacksmithofangels:
BlacksmithofAngels Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
should really sell this one!
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:iconchiaralovestwilight:
Chiaralovestwilight Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2014
This is amazing! I can stare at this all day ;)
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:iconares1976:
ares1976 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2014
Pfff, very nice! Expression says everything.
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:icondwgood:
dwgood Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2014  Hobbyist
Exquisite 
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:iconfawania:
Fawania Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
amazed Clap Clap Clap Clap 
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:iconwilliamson13:
williamson13 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow, what a powerful work !

Heart +fav Heart 
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:icontammyphotography:
TammyPhotography Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Just WOW! :heart:
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:iconx-bossie-boots-x:
x-bossie-boots-x Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow outstanding :)
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:iconhackounet:
HacKounet Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014
It's more in the eyes than anything, you get close to real things. Great job :)
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:iconliljackslade:
liljackslade Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Student General Artist
I'm obsessed with this.
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:icondemon57:
Demon57 Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Intriguing artistry and congratulations on DD.
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:iconemporeranime:
emporeranime Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
I love the lighting you chose! :D 
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:iconlehnaru:
Lehnaru Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Could you please provide this in a slightly larger size? I'd love to use it as my desktop background! ^_^
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:iconchibi-demon-angel694:
chibi-demon-angel694 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very nice! :)
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:iconbluenightwolf:
bluenightwolf Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is absolutely stunning 
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:iconthegalleryofeve:
TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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:iconartbrojohn:
ArtbroJohn Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
Very cool!
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:iconpozolegirl:
pozolegirl Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is beautiful.
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:icondbeeers:
DBEEERS Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014
Very wonderfully done. It certainly leaves a lasting impression.
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:iconroguishbard:
RoguishBard Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Strong and beautiful. Much like my cousin.

The Captain in the National Guard.
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:iconelsevilla:
elsevilla Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
Solid composition.
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:icondantesagittariknight:
DanteSagittariKnight Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Lara Croft ... are you? <3 :la:
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:iconbeanieintherye:
BeanieInTheRye Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
VERY beautiful, I love the lighting!
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:icondoublebladed12:
DoubleBladed12 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Student General Artist
picture or drawing?
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:iconbluenightvessel:
BlueNightVessel Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Student Digital Artist
This is so deserving of a DD, GREAT JOB! :heart:
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:icon147combatmedic:
147CombatMedic Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014
Gratz on the DD!
:w00t:
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:iconrnoise:
Rnoise Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Stunning.

Really a beautiful piece.
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:icondemyier:
Demyier Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Student Artist
Beautiful
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ofthestarrs Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Student Photographer
This is just stunning. I'm honestly speechless.
The emotion captured in this photo alone speaks millions, but your caption (thank you, dad) felt like a punch to the gut. A very well deserved DD. Congrats! :clap:
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ZenScout Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Nailed It.  There's more than one story here...witch ever one it is it's deep and raw.
Grateful you shared this! and congrats on your well deserved DD
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VengefulNoodles Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist
My sister look's like the girl in the picture 
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:iconnyasiaesylvester:
NyasiaEsylvester Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Professional
absolutely beautiful picture
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:iconlianthanis:
Lianthanis Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014
I think this is just beautiful - especially as the smudges on your face could serve as tears as well, if one wants to see them that way. So for me, it's expressive enough :)
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AgonizingSwordfish Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Amazing! Congrats on the DD :)
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DaddyHoggy Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014
A startling image - you are quite mesmerising in this. Shocking and yet incredibly beautiful.

If you don't mind me drawing parallels - you remind me of Emily Blunt's character in "Edge of Tomorrow"
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